This post originally stemmed from a question about Something Strange and Deadly. … This day went from great to very scary within seconds. He’s in and out of consciousness. It’s nothing, she told herself, I’m imagining things. At least dying didn’t hurt, I thought. I started looking around and freaking out. He goes all the way past me before I realize the 2 red sticks are his tibias; he is not sitting with his legs folded under him; his legs have been blasted off. He has large knots on his head. it took a long time for them to get down and rescue me and the moped shop was very pissed off about the loss of their moped. That was when she saw a shape in the window over the sink. I use my Bluetooth to call 911. He starts accelerating, first like he’s going to ram me, then at the last moment passes me illegally on a turn. My boyfriend is screaming my name. if I was going to make it off the roller coaster I was riding. Thank you for taking the time to read all this.”. If not, I don’t recommend watching them at night. WALKING DEAD. Lately, though, I’ve taken to watching things outside my usual movie/TV fare—scarier things, to be precise. Great post! !ive got to write a scene from a horror story to add to my GCSE grade and this will help me a lot^-^ x. The bike in the windshield and then later when he acts like the cross is repelling him but it ISN’T. First I see a big dude without a shirt laying in the middle of the road. I would not hesitate to say that this is the best advice I’ve ever received about crafting horror scenes that really do scare the readers. In fact, let’s break down an examples. Of him trying to move forward in life after losing me. This reference page can help answer the question what are some adjectives commonly used for describing MOMENTS. It started with a bag full of used needles. ghastly (used mostly for appearances) ghoulish (a ghoul, in stories, is an evil spirit that open graves and eats the dead bodies in them. When the character walks blindly into a Bad Situation, all our instincts are screeching at her to stop. There was…a lot of blood pretty much everywhere. Of course, timing can be hard to get on the first try, so don’t worry if it’s one of those things you fix during revisions or with the help of a crit partner. Except…Jeff was staying at his dorm tonight, Mom was at the Baker’s, Dad had the late shift, and Aunt Carol was still at Aunt Sissie’s…, Kayla set aside her book, straining to hear, but her heart pounded too loudly and her breathing was harsh…. I was fine but when the police evacuated us out of the school they kinda walked us right through the area where it started. ‘I will burn this whole house down if I have to’ gets screamed at us as my mother breaks my door with a large knife in her hand. I was 25 at the time too. Then it’s as if I blacked out of fell asleep because what seemed like centuries or eons later, I opened my eyes to see nothing but darkness and could hear nothing. I will review my short story and make big changes keeping these four points in mind. The man gets out of his car with a weapon and starts running towards me. I looked up and couldn’t even see it, it was so bright white that I had to look away from the pain of trying to see it. Please write back ASAP!!!!! I felt all the pain I was going to incur on my dad if I died. At this point my mother starts trying to hit on some of her friends and demands to sleep right next to them. Some of my favorite scary shows are THE WALKING DEAD and AMERICAN HORROR STORY. A creative description for an scary man? “This fucked me up so badly that I can’t even remember how old I was. And the thoughts you have when you think you are going to get shot are quite odd. You can use those expectations to your advantage here. At roughly 7am in the winter on mountain county back roads, a giant ford 350 decides I’m going to slow. (Bonus: David Tennant, shirtless. I will hear them say ‘that wasn’t what I wanted’ for the rest of my life.”. They hadn’t moved one of the bodies out either and had covered him up with a blanket but we knew. I need a weapon! Scary Night - Original Writing I was now ready to depart after the party, exiting my Cousin’s house. Then I see a vehicle fully engulfed in flames. SOMETHING STRANGE AND DEADLY has a lot of scary scenes, and it’s first person…but my WIP is 3rd person and also has scary stuff. I’m alive, and I am hanging almost upside down, caught by my backpack straps in a tree which is growing out of the cliff side. The crane cable tension was tight on the piece he was cutting so when the worker cut through enough of it the cable ripped half of it up the hill and the worker’s chainsaw went straight up into his head. If the reader sees it coming, it’s just not as scary. I still occasionally will have terrible nightmares about being trapped somewhere with someone with a gun.”. But nothing. Just thinking of it again gives me shivers.”. We are cramming pages aside to find out. For example, when Kayla walks into the kitchen, what do you EXPECT to see? The worst part was they didn’t immediately die. How to write a scary scene lily’s nice blog – You’ll buy the adeptness in Christian louboutin shoe. The protagonist can hear strange “clanking” sounds, or a scary character can speak in a “dark,” “steely,” “sepulchral,” “sibilant” or “guttural” voice. I know I was in elementary school and it was before Grade 4. I’ll definitely keep them in mind if I write a scary scene . They poured gasoline over themselves and set themselves on fire. I screamed, stumbled and hit the ground with a loud thump. Once, I was the only one awake in the house, and I found the front door open. I was so excited to finally see her. © 2012-2018 Pub(lishing) Crawl. I pull over and get out. I just stay with my guy until I’m relieved by paramedics. Writing scary scenes, for me, are always the most fun. I’m working on a scary scene. I found some very good friends I now call family to take me in, but my sister was not so lucky. Writing the scary, the action, and the love scenes are what I call “cookie scenes”–they’re my favorite to write and usually the ones that require the least editing later on. Have you seen them? She darted toward the wide, granite-countered island. I found out later he had to be life-flighted to a larger hospital because he had bleeding on the brain. Anyway, we were on the Greek Island of Corfu (some ferry routes fell under the Inter-Rail system) and hired little 50cc mopeds for a couple of days so we could see the island. I had to suck everything up and comfort my parents with false hope by saying this is probably BS. When the Big Scare finally arrives, it can’t be exactly what the reader/viewer expects—or it can’t come from exactly where the reader expects. Really nice description please! I’ll have to check out Fright Night, as I haven’t seen it yet but it looks very good! He had passed of SIDS sometime during the night. As a reader, we are certain without a doubt that the Big Scare is coming. Yet when I arrive there I was so scared and shaken up that I had to confirm several times that it wasn’t a nightmare. LOVE this post!!! The hospital says I am going to go into surgery on later in the week on Friday (it was Monday when I arrived). I had to sleep with a nightlight for a week. I am the world’s BIGGEST wuss, and my overactive imagination is not to be trifled with. There’s people trying to flip it. I walk out of my bedroom to see what is going on only to see her collapse on the floor holding my infant brother. The poor man even pissed himself. Smooth, right? I wrote my WIP as 1st person, and then rewrote it all as multiple 3rd POV! Not even fucking close. The reader/viewer must be focused entirely on the scene with introspection absolutely restricted to reaction to surroundings. For a moment, you think you're safe. ', '#d36a50', 'A0061DWD');kofiwidget2.draw(); Enter your email address to receive notifications of new posts. I realize that the something at the top of the stairs was trying to talk to me. Oh jeez, I think WOMAN IN BLACK might be too much for me. Best trip ever, and cost peanuts compared to what I spend on holidays now with my two rugrats. I’m facing them, to give them the little cups, so I’m looking back down the race course at the finish line about 50 ft from me. . I am a small 26 years old woman in a Mazda 3. bit in value, you are receiving dividends that can offset The volunteers around me run too, everybody runs (except me & another volunteer), except the cops. Just write what comes naturally, read through it a few times, and try to find the right balance. That knowledge is built into the genre. Growing up I have always had trust issues so whenever a relative passed away I was like ‘meh’ because I never allowed myself to become attached. “Watching as a nice nurse tried more and more desperately (and in vain) to find my unborn son’s heartbeat at 32 weeks.”, “Two days ago I saw my little brother try (and succeed) in hanging himself. I was with a youth group on a mission trip. But then the floorboard beside the stove groaned once. Everybody jumps, it was LOUD, everybody turns and looks—all the hundreds of faces that a second ago had been facing me are all now swiveled the other way. Again, think of a movie: when the scariest stuff is about to come on the stage, there is no background music. She threw a glance back to the window, and realized the reflection was just herself. His body was on survival mode to keep his lungs pumping air. Her breath whooshed out. As for “the readers knows more”, this more applies to our shared knowledge as a culture. Wow, Sooz, this is such an awesome post – the advice will definitely be put to good use in my current WIP! After about 100 yards of driving backwards he stops. Twice. Someone is doing CPR on him. We decided to go eat that afternoon. I’ve read many before but never found such good advice even in books such as ‘On Writing Horror’. http://lily0226.reisebloggo.de/195629/You-ll-buy-the-adeptness-in-Christian-louboutin-shoe/. I really needed this today. We are sitting there for a minute, when he starts revving his engine. And here’s what I’ve  come up with—a few things I think are needed to make an edge-of-the-seat scene: Now, keep in mind that scary scenes aren’t confined to horror flicks. Does that make sense? I started begging this thing to send me back. Lucky for us the police station was about a 5 min walk from our home so the cops were there after about 10 min of our little bedroom standoff, as soon as we saw the cops lights out the window my mom dropped my sister and sealed herself off in her room. About the Author: Philip Athans. Next thing I know my sister has grabbed the phone telling me to call the cops and my father while she starts barricading my door with her body. With that I sat down and thought about what makes a scene scary—how I crafted the frightening bits and what I found scariest in movies/books. We try to tell ourselves we are being irrational, and if we can only prove to ourselves exactly that, everything will be fine. i too have had luck like this, and was grateful for it. These cops who had been standing nearby chitchatting are like instinctively instantly running TOWARD the booms. <3, Oh, good! Then a deathly white hand reaches out from under a table, grabbing at your ankles! My Parents Moved Me Into A Room That Terrified Me When I Was Young. Edit. Dedicated to your stories and ideas. That was almost 20 years ago now and I am grateful to just be alive and spend time with my dad and family.”. Then I noticed someone at the bottom of the steps and something at the top. That seemed relativity normal for the location. Yet out of a desire to understand thrillers a wee bit better, I’ve forced myself to watch more (through my fingers, of course). Eventually I see traffic starting to slow ahead. It was nighttime – about 11.30pm, the sky was very dark due to clouds and we were heading back to our hostel via a very steep, very bendy mountain road which had cliff drops at the side. Multiple people died. Logic flew out the window as I proceeded to ask an officer ‘what are the chances of my brother being alive?’ Knowing that it’s been hours since he jumped. It felt like I was standing there forever hoping no one got hurt. It’s been raining off and on so I’m taking my time and trying to be safe. Call the police! Not many people in my life know about this experience and the ones who do don't have any idea how much it affected me. <3 Especially since it's in Georgia, where I grew up. We DEFINITELY can’t relax until we know we’re just being ridiculous. Excellent post!!! That was three years ago, and although my PTSD has become much, MUCH more manageable, that is the moment that I still have nightmares about. All Rights Reserved. Remember #1: It’s this expectation combined with the character’s visceral reaction that rockets up the tension. I have never felt so helpless actually. Can you write like a paragraph (5-7 sentences) on his eyes. I turn around to look at it SLOWLY. I remember thinking I don’t want to die, looking up at the ceiling and everything turning white. some of the losses. Really good tips I’ll use in my WIP. Mysteries, spy flicks, fantasies—these genres can all have some truly terrifying scenes (ever read Lirael by Garth Nix? Of course, to make this work, you have to know WHAT readers expect. What do you think about this advice. Someone is stuck inside. Screaming, you fight with the bones as they entangle your arms and legs! I tried to pull over so he didn’t hit me, but skidded and went straight off the cliff edge at about 30mph. Scary enough, but then a truck comes tearing up around a blind bend at us, on the wrong side of the road – his lights were on full beam and dazzled me totally. We secured the weapon and applied pressure on his face until the paramedics showed up. Scary Moment In Life Narrative Essay. The EMT couldn’t find my veins so he ended up piercing my arms on both sides repeatedly, attempting to find them (creating my fear of needles). My sister then grabs the phone screaming for help as my mother grabs her by the throat and picks her up and presses her against my window. Of course, the character could know something is wrong—she might realize something ain’t right in the kitchen, but she still behaves in a way that goes against every survival instinct we think we have.1 And to increase tension here, you (the writer) have to show us her growing fear. Great examples that will help me loads. It was suppose to be scary, but now that I come to see it does not compare to how I felt later on during the night. They’re almost always my favorite part of any book. NOOOOO!”  We inherently know something is wrong, but our heroine doesn’t. You just have to build up that suspense! I do not drive that road anymore.”. History Talk (0) Comments Share. “My roommate and I were playing Battlefield 2 when his brother walked into the room, pulled out a handgun, and shot himself in the face. This film is one amazing mash-up of clever storytelling, wonderful characters, and terrifying scenes. To transfer that same sensation to the page, we zoom in completely on the scene and the character’s fright/visceral reactions. It was inactive until I had hit my head very hard on the bumper, then it started wrapping around my brain stem and pulling it out. Large guy knocked him out with one punch but from what I heard it was a vicious punch. I had not seen her for five days straight. Another word for scary. An important thing to note is that my mother was a psychiatrist (she lost her license for attempting to kill a patient) so she had a very large collection of pain killers, psychedelics and more. A lady tells me the kids mother is on the other side of the interstate and seems in bad shape. And also, do you have any advice for effectively creating a “the reader knows something the character doesn’t know” situation when writing in first person? In a film filled with scary moments, that was perhaps the most shocking to me. Learn about us. 532 comments. “I was watching this as an interested neighbor. It was raining. Someone was in the house. I have never seen a huge crowd flee in panic before, let alone a crowd that had been so exhausted before. What a great set of tips! I have a wide variety of issues that stemmed both from the cyst and that experience but that is for another time. Some photos are worth a thousand words—others, a thousand screams. I tried decided to try and reenact a Dennis Rodman dive to try save it from going off the driveway. So it was my sister’s 13th birthday party and my mother decided to down an entire bottle of cough syrup, enough vodka to kill most people, and probably something else. Like always, Mom had left her chopping knife out. And you watched it ALONE?! We’ve seen enough movies to know the tropes: psycho-killer/demon/werewolf is waiting for her. The Scariest Moment of My Life. My rapist was someone I trusted, a former professor of mine. Hide! (Of course, sometimes there really is a killer behind the kitchen island. It helps with writing suspense so much! It was well hidden far into the mountains, and we happened to live close to the oldest church in New Mexico where we had several relatives buried. Kayla slid her fingers around the rubber grip, appalled by how much her hands shook. I was surrounded by my family. We all KNOW that going into the kitchen alone is bad idea (especially since we KNOW we’re watching a horror movie). Sorry, your blog cannot share posts by email. Apologies for TMI but it is necessary. But I'm stuck on the eyes. Show us her widened eyes, show the eye nerves beneath her pure optical lens, shallow breaths, and cautious steps. I'm doing a descriptive writing on an scary, creepy, murderous mans eyes. Growing up I have always had trust issues so whenever a relative passed away I was like ‘meh’ because I never allowed myself to become attached. Thanks a lot for it. But he has apparently recovered and still up to his old ways. Kayla crept into the kitchen. “You are one big flippin’ baby, Kay—”. British divers Jason Milleson and Chris Jewell told "The Mail on Sunday" that Jewell almost lost his grip as he brought the second-to-last boy out of the cave. To be totally honest, I’ve learned a bit more about the subject since I first tackled it. Blood pouring from his mouth because several of his teeth had been knocked out. I could’ve killed you.’ He went on to brutally beat and rape me that night, and two other times before I got the courage to report it to the police and the legal system. 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